I would like to apply for a job at the Night Zoo to get my
own magical C4 panda and hypnotic, psychic penguins and a nukecorn (nuclear
unicorn) to travel and destroy the world, blow up the inner core of the Land of
Nilth and kill every, single, living monster, just to save the Night Zoo from
these evil monsters. I will destroy their leader then rain peace over the world
to save all the precious animals. These lands can then be safe again and peace
will be restored. That’s why I would love to be the International Night Zookeeper.
By Rohan
I really like the use of words in your story it made me want to keep reading. I wonder if you will become the Night Zookeeper.
ReplyDelete-Maggie
Rohan this story is one of the best story's that I have ever seen. I like the nuclear unicorn and all of the other types of magical animals. I reckon you will defeat the Nilth monsters if you were the night zoo keeper.
ReplyDeleteMaclaren
Hello Rohan,
ReplyDeleteWhat a fantastic application for the job of Night Zookeeper - if I was in charge the job would be yours! I thought you showed great imagination in your writing with very creative adjectives! I was left wondering what it would be like to meet a psychic, hypnotic penguin or a nukecorn!
I could sense your enthusiasm for the job - you had lots to say. In fact your first sentence takes up 4 lines of the blog and has several different ideas in it. To develop your writing you might like to think about dividing up such long sentences, to have only one or two ideas in each one.
Very well done - my favourite application so far!
Clare, Team 100