Jack woke up in excitement as it was the
day of the Essendon and Hawthorn Grand Final 2014. The game started at 2:15pm
so Jack’s mum had planned that they would go to the shopping centre first...but Jack argued and said, "No way! We won’t make it from there to the footy with all the traffic." His Mum just shook her head, turned and didn’t listen. They got in the car
to leave the house at 12:00pm. Jack was nagging his mum as they got caught in traffic
after they had been at the shops. Jack’s mum said, "Sorry, I thought I had enough
time."
By Nathan
By Nathan
Simple and very well written. I enjoyed reading your story Nathan as it kept me reading to see what happens to Jack. Well done. :-)
ReplyDeleteNathan,
ReplyDeleteThis as an enjoyable 100WC- anyone who reads this can empathise with this as they have probably had the same problems before, and your varied sentence structure helps your story to flow well and keep the reader wanting to know- will they make it on time despite the traffic? Very well written.
Emily, Team100